1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
You could add more about what the new renovations will look like for people who don't know much about what is happening.
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
The lead is very involving. I was exuberent to read this article!
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
Yes, you understand exactly what renovations are happening at the library.
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
I thought it was fantastic! Just spell of right next time.
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